A hundred hours
Of solitude
Wearing away at the edges
Lost
In the multitude
Twanging
Like
A rusty guitar
Staring
at a
Sad little star
Fear
Draining out
Seeping from
Under the door
You see it now
Now it's no more
A wild
Enigma
Is what's in store
The train of thought
It finally stopped
The life
It halted.
It's all
So faulted.
Abstract. What is being talked about?
ReplyDeleteWhat do you think is being talked about?
ReplyDeleteLike ateendra has said- abstract in a sharp manner perhaps....
ReplyDeleteBut then Aren't abstract poem to be left for the reader to see them as he wishes rather than to sketch out it's meaning...
Yes.. that's why I put that question forward :)
ReplyDeleteTo me, it's not abstract at all, actually.
If the reader has to do something, then what is the poet for? Only write some words which he/she thinks is related to the title? And then the reader is left to make out some meaning of them and connect them. I don't know where I can see futileness in the above words? If you get to write a poem on something you think futile, is it then too futile? What if a reader like me thinks that nothing is futile and your abstraction doesn't work for him? You have to make him believe that somethings are futile and that by abstraction is not possible. Why is the star sad? How can it be? Why is the guitar rusty? Where was its owner when it was getting rusted? How much is the fare for the train?
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A rusty guitar"
I like this - a really nice post.
@ Ateendra
ReplyDeletePoems are not written to please, or impress. Compare a commercial hit and a silent art film. This is probably one of the latter. And you're the wrong kind of audience.
I am me and you are you.
There are a lot of things in this world that don't make sense. And this is not one of them.
@ Singer
Thank you :)
I really like this poem, I think it speaks to something universal in all of us. Nice work.
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ReplyDeleteThanks a bunch! "Universal" is what I thought it was.. thanks for the reassurance :)
liked it! :)
ReplyDeleteThank you! :)
ReplyDeleteEven though I don't quite understand it, I really love the feel I get from it so I think its a really great poem.
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:) :)
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