Silently
Suffering
Slashes of
Sweet sacrifices
Sometimes simple
Something suffices
Silently
Shredded sheets
Stoic squeeze
Sunshine that stoops
Steers
Sneers so, sees
Slipping off
Summits of surety
Surprising smiles
Surrendering to
Scenes of
Silent singing
Simpering, soft
Soliloquies
Settling to
Stuttering lies
Standing
Sitting
Stunned
Silently
Time flies
Someone's left
Silently,
Binging on byes.
A beautiful poem and a beautiful presentation. There is so much action going on but still you are able to keep all the Silent effect throughout the whole poem. Its just amazing. Poems like these speak for themselves. I feel stupid now that I don't have words that can match yours to praise your fine piece of art.
ReplyDeleteWonderful use of alliteration! Superb, for sure.
ReplyDeleteWonderful, no doubt. I liked your use of oxymorons and how you had maintained the pathos throughout the poem notwithstanding the occasional moments of elation; everything expressed with sheer simplicity and cloudy clarity(contrast!). 'Silence is more eloquent than eloquence itself'. You reiterated it.
ReplyDeletenice!
ReplyDelete@ Ateendra
ReplyDeleteThank you.
And yes, you are kind of stupid. :D
@ T. Mukherjee
Thanks a bunch. :)
@ Sayak Shome
Thank you so much. And you speak in alliterations too.
@ myMinks_LoeWongola
Thanks!
Pyaari Poem hai. You end up making so much sense :)
ReplyDeleteThank you, Aadya :)
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